Well Done Eli! I can tell you worked hard on this creative writing task. I would love if you could tell us more like, did you get to meet any of the people you saw? Keep up the good work.
Eli, I love the imagination and thought you have put into this story. I would love to have flying chair. At the end of your writing you said "they were as small as ants" This type of writing is called a simile this is when you describe something by saying it is as or like something else. Could you write some similes for these things: The elephant was as big as..... The sun shone like... Eli is as clever as.... Keep up the awesome work. This story has so much great language in it. I can't wait to read you next story which I hope is even longer with more detail and description. You are a star Eli. I am super proud of you. From Mrs Carruthers
Wow, great writing Eli. I really like how you used interesting adjectives to help us to imagine what your rainbow is like.
ReplyDeleteWell Done Eli! I can tell you worked hard on this creative writing task. I would love if you could tell us more like, did you get to meet any of the people you saw? Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteEli, I love the imagination and thought you have put into this story. I would love to have flying chair. At the end of your writing you said "they were as small as ants" This type of writing is called a simile this is when you describe something by saying it is as or like something else.
ReplyDeleteCould you write some similes for these things:
The elephant was as big as.....
The sun shone like...
Eli is as clever as....
Keep up the awesome work. This story has so much great language in it. I can't wait to read you next story which I hope is even longer with more detail and description.
You are a star Eli. I am super proud of you.
From Mrs Carruthers
Eli I like your writing because your description uses good words.
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